Tuesday, October 22, 2013

Stand up




Literary response to The sound of Hollyhocks

If I could stand up, I wont be dominated.

If I could stand up,I wont let her leave .

If I could stand up,I wont hear the flowers.

If I could stand up,I wont leave the world.

My hope has been destroyed.

My dream has been ruined.

My love has been taken away.

My life has been threw.

I wish I stood up, so I could save her.

I wish I stood up, so I could be myself.

I wish I stood up, so I could go back.

I wish I stood up, so I could be good.

I wish I can go back, back to our good times.

I wish I can go back, back to my family.

I wish I can go back, back to my normal life.

I wish I can go back, back to the world.

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4 comments:

  1. UnknownOctober 23, 2013 at 2:29 PM

    Hey John, I really like your poem!

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  2. blueeeOctober 23, 2013 at 2:35 PM

    I like how you described Bill's desperation in his heart :)

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  3. AnonymousOctober 23, 2013 at 2:53 PM

    I liked the repetition in your poem.
    Wont (x) Won't (o)
    Good job

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  4. Ms. K.December 1, 2013 at 9:30 AM

    yes, good use of repetition for effect
    Where are your other posts?

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